- A lot can be done to the grammar of the essay- the structuring of awfully long sentences, introducing semi-colons, getting rid of empty phrases, making sentences less awkward!
- More context in the introduction of chapter two, give enough context so anyone can understand. Give more context to the Salon Des Refuses and it's relevance and transition to the contemporary art market.
- Work on triangulation!!!!!! Link ideas together, smooth it out
- There is potential for Finster to be the biggest case study- with information not just from him or his interviewers but his dealers and even say, REM discussing why they chose him- even if they're not academic it is still the opinion of those who bought into him.
- More voices of dealers and curators in general: need the pros and cons of O.A. to establish my own strong opinion. And evidence of the negativity towards Finster
- Are there any more reviews of Chomo?
- Discuss how Chomo forged his own identity and personality BY being reclusive. Reminiscent of Banksy (haha). Was Chomo interested in creating a BRAND, even if he didn't realise this?
- Small intro to case studies would be nice
- Write about the practical study in the methodology
- Reference things nicely :-)
PRACTICAL RESPONSE THOUGHTS:
I have written in a notebook my feelings about the project and need to blog that BUT....
- abandoning the social media aspect of the project isn't that bad as it's something that is justified and found through trial, error and personal research
- key words: PRIVATE PRACTICE
- question how private anyone can be (especially when already established as an artist online and in the real world)
- I'm never and not trying to be an outsider artist, but to investigate the ideas of the authentic in isolation and repetition. Like a really low-key Chomo.
- how I would do the project if I wanted to get my teeth really into ideas of the authentic- how actual isolation from other visual work and projects must go. Chomo it etc
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